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Old 08-15-03, 03:56 AM
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Collection of poems about my new love

Unexpected visitor, tall and kind
reaches into my life,I reach back in short time.
His gifts are himself, as are mine.
just foggy late night shopping, what a find!.

What goeth oneth in my hearteth?
A passing fancy? Am I clingy? or ..
another somethingy?
so little I know, so much I feel,.
molecular merging, passion surging.
My heart wants to climb inside of yours
I wonder who we are yet?


Looking in the eyes of you,
I withhold a bit, we are so new.
Wanting so, to hold you more,
insatiable feelers/feelees..are.....
Invisibly sneaking under your door
uncontrollable tendrons of desires that really can stretch for miles,
What a nice sensation!
My invisible, uncontrollable tentacles compiled. . Or...
Is this just the benefit of an over active imagination?

standing still,
my arms hold you tight.
I want to stay, in this one spot all night.
Breathing your breath, so close to your heart,
Only.............................................. .buzzzzzzzzzzz
zzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz.. a mosquito could tear us apart.
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I like it Janine, creative language!
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I think your poem is clever and creative and the way the rhyming patterns work together really makes it enjoyable to read......and I know nothing about poetry, by the way.....so there's your layperson's opinion
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Those are absolutely brilliant.

Thank you so much for sharing them.
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Gee whiz, I forgot I posted them.
What a nice surprise to have them enjoyed!
Thankyou, I must read the other new ones now.
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I also know nothing of poetry

but I quite enjoyed reading it

It certanly showed your feelings
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Re: Collection of poems about my new love

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Originally posted by janine

What goeth oneth in my hearteth?
A passing fancy? Am I clingy? or ..
another somethingy?

...I wonder who we are yet?

...insatiable feelers/feelees..are.....

...What a nice sensation!
My invisible, uncontrollable tentacles compiled. . Or...
Is this just the benefit of an over active imagination?

...Only........................................... ....buzzzzzzzzzzz
zzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz.. a mosquito could tear us apart.
These are the phrases in particular that gave me a little mental zing. You have a wonderful talent for saying something interesting, where someone else might just put mere words...
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And Paul, you have a talent for saying something interesting -- when describing something that is interesting -- where someone else might just put mere words......(the way feedback is shared is everything....)
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