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That sentence that you wrote, is beautiful and poetic.

Am I doing it right ?
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Re: Writing in the active voice using action verbs

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Re: Writing in the active voice using action verbs

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Re: Writing in the active voice using action verbs

I got valuable information from you. thanks for sharing, yes we need to express our feeling with good English, simple and readable sentence.
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Re: Writing in the active voice using action verbs

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Re: Writing in the active voice using action verbs

Ocyan, I think that the most active sentence would be: "You wrote a sentence that is beautiful and poetic."

And Silvren, what does it for me is asking myself if I can immediately understand from the sentence who acted?

A sentence was written. A crime was committed. A rock was thrown. All passive.

Anonymous wrote a sentence. My client committed a crime. Silvren threw a rock. All active.

Passive voice is handy when you don't know the actor. So "a rock was thrown into the crowd," just tells you that the author either doesn't know who threw it, or wants to hide who threw it.

In my legal writing, I only ever use passive voice when I don't know something, or am trying to conceal something.
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